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Chapter 4
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Here's a long one for ya'll - 4643 words. Sorry it took a little longer to write. A bit heavy on dialogue but I was trying to get the whole back story out. Hope you enjoy!

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Currently, it was set to show farmland in the evening.
Awwwwww! What a sweet detail!

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He somehow missed them more now than he had before their too short visit.
This is so realistic. And I love how much he loves them!

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‘She’s nervous too,’ Clark thought to himself. They were back at square one.
It's nice that he reads her this well. It really feels in character.

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He knew how she felt – abandoned among strangers with no way home.
That's a really nice comparison there.

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“Moby Dick, To Kill a Mockingbird, A Tale of Two Cities, The Lord of the Rings…”
It's nice how familiar the character is, even is such a widely different set of circumstances.

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an old baseball, a small globe of the Earth, a Luke Skywalker action figure.
Sweet to see a collection of childhood reminiscences.

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a grey t-shirt which read ‘Kansas State University’ in purple letters.
It's fun how many clues you give us about how long he was there!

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“I didn’t realize I was going to have to go without chocolate.”
The Lois Lane dealbreaker! lol

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I’ve had these abilities since I was a kid and – not gonna lie – it’s a lot harder to control superspeed when you’re eight than it is when you’re an adult.”
lol

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My father miscalculated. He predicted the first large tremor which shook Krypton’s core and sent me into space just before it struck. However, he thought that tremor would trigger a series of quakes which would destroy the planet within days. He was wrong. That first tremor was only the beginning. But once it hit, my father’s warning could no longer be denied. Other scientists had already come to the same conclusion.
This is such a great, logical explanation!

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When they didn’t… he decided to go looking for me.
Awww! Yay! I feel like this is the fairy tale story for a kid without his birth parents.

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"And once he’d opened hostilities with Earth, there was no way I could go home.”
Yet another reason to hate the character!

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“So, you see, it’s my fault. They never would have come to Earth if it wasn’t for me.”
Oh no... poor Clark. That's a lot of guilt to tote around.

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Jor-El adopted Ching as his son and heir.
Love this, too! Its a win for everyone!

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I love the people of Earth and the people of New Krypton. I genuinely want what is best for both planets and I hope I can help build trust between our worlds.
Sounds like a job for Superman.

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“Would you like me to call you Clark?” she asked, smiling softly.
He shook his head. “I would like that very much, but you’d better not.”
Awww.

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She’d seen them fly on television and a few times in person, but almost always in an intimidating, warlike manner. This though… this was just so casual.
This is such a dynamic juxtaposition to highlight. Coming out of this situation, the flying could be totally traumatizing. It's really nice to see her react more to him than to the reminder of war.

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He just smiled. “You have a really nice laugh.”
Awwww!

Thanks for posting this for all of us waiting for it! Looking forward to following this story!


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oh no, my first comment prowess slipped :P

hahahah we're back to farmboy and flyboy smile . I just love Lois discovering his roots this way. This is actually kind of scratching the same itch as the fic idea where she 'dates' the Superman identity first and then gradually uncovers the boy-scout farm-boy Clark identity, albeit from a pretty different angle / situation of course.

Loved the books and trinkets on his shelf telling part of that backstory.

Also, I am a sucker for a good there-is-only-one-bed and Clark being a total gentleman, also. But... surely he can't sleep on the floor forever... ^_^'''

This chapter clears up a lot more things about this Clark's backstory and also about Ching– and wow what a doozy for a young Clark to live with the knowledge that his presence on Earth helped Nor find it.

I continue to be riveted by your writing, I did not notice any typos btw, and also your ability to have them start to loosen up around each other, while still lost of heavy themes are present at the same time. Most of my burning questions / thoughts have come up at this point in the story, and now (it seems at least) we are heading into the unknown of New Krypton, and lots of new experiences for Lois. Wonder how long will the yellow-sun powers last? Or the chocolate supplies, for that matter? How will their relationship deepen, what conflicts might come up for them to handle- or not? At the Planet in canon, Lois had a lot of existing reporting experience/confidence and opinions on how things should be done and generally she had a lot of autonomy, and here she is out of her element, literally away from her planet and everyone familiar who might have given her guidance, doesn't know the language and customs. Plus- the main areas of conflict in canon (the whole Superman triangle, Lex, all the little disagreements about stories/investigations) are not present here. The scope of where you can go with this is SO broad, I'm very excited about where this goes. I suspect she'll still be a force to be reckoned with, even if it is behind closed doors.

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Oh I'm loving this fic! Poor Clark, blaming himself for everything, and having to essentially leave the only home he'd ever known. How old is he again? If he left when he was 12 and is an adult now, it's been at least 6 years, right? Is that enough time to start feeling more like a part of his new family? I genuinely don't know. This whole AU is fascinating!


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