I really liked reading this story. You certainly surprised me by letting the night and almost the next day out, so we knew as little as Lois did what had happened between Clark and Mayson. Lois's logic was super, as was their fight.
Your description was sensual, but I am glad that Clark could be patient because Lois tends to panic afterwards.
But you simply can't leave it here. You must write the sequel real soon. And of course nfic also
There is two points I hoped you would think about: First, you should tell earlier during the story at least something (not all) what went wrong between Lois and Clark, that you tell their situation *before* the story isn't enough. Secondly, I find it hard to believe that if Clark isn't guilt-stricken about Mayson's death, why would he take distance from Lois, when she tries to explain her behavior. So I hope, that you had another reasons for it.
