Lynn,
Just to throw another opinion in there, I was actually glad you did not include the conversation between Clark and Mayson. In a way, I had been both anticipating and dreading the posting of Part 3. I felt sorry for Mayson, and no matter how many versions of the break-up scene I played out in my head, I couldn't find any that wouldn't be downright painful. I wanted to get past Mayson & Clark's break-up without actually having to go through it. (Sort of like how Clark wants Lois to know about Superman, but dreads the actual telling.) Anyway, I understand others wanted to see that scene (and I have every confidence that you would have written it beautifully), but, as for me, I was quite happy with the way you chose to write Part 3.
I will admit I was initially surprised to see Part 3 begin at the end of the next day. But, again, I can't complain. I found the way you wrote that opening scene, the fight with Lois, and our gradual understanding of what had transpired over the past 24 hours to be nothing short of brilliant!
Altogether, I loved this story, from start to finish, and I wouldn't have you change a thing. I would, of course, be more than happy to see a sequel!!!!!
- Vicki
PS - I found what I believe to be a typo. (I say this hesitantly, because the last time I pointed out an "error" in someone's story, it turns out I had merely read it wrong.) At one point, you say (of Clark) that "he covered his body with hers". Since Clark is on top, I believe it should read "he covered her body with his."
