Lynn,
I was so glad to find part three, I can't tell you. I have nothing but respect for your muse, gifted she is, but I felt like I stood on the other side of that door with Lois for a long, looong time.
Ok, here is what I love about your writing. It is unexpected. It doesn't follow from A to B to C, and I love not knowing what is going to happen next, how you make it all unfold.
So, I adored that you started us out the day AFTER. That Clark walks through the door kicking the snow off his boots, and we are as frantic and clueless as Lois. And yes I didn't really think you would commit a huge sin and have Clark and Mayson do that thing, but see previous para as regards "unexpected", still what a huge relief to hear him say that Mayson was gone. Whew!
Next- not trying to write a book here- favorite part is when Lois declares that when she gets back to Metropolis she is going to march over to *Clark's* place and just do it. Adore how he hears her right, and tries to convince her of what she said. Could hear their voices! Love that.
Last, IMHO- which you can disregard, Clark driving Mayson back and then leaving Jeep and flying... It makes sense to me that after a long evening in the cabin with the wrong woman, and an endless and awkward ride home, that our hero would be claustrophobic, and would need to get himself above the clouds. Thus leaving the Jeep and just heading straight up, clear his head, erase the horrible memories, yada yada.
Did I mention I loved this whole thing, and that I'd like for you to just get to work on something else now, pretty please?
CC-
