Good suggestions, Yvonne. I, for one, am happy to receive any tips I can get on improving my writing, and I try not to take them as a personal affront, although I admit I can sometimes be as thin-skinned as the next person. Introspection is very popular in L&C Fanfic right now, but it was not always so. I'm not particularly fond of long passages of introspection, but that doesn't mean I think it should go away, and it doesn't mean I don't read it when I find a particularly good story line. Because so many newbies are joining the group and beginning to write, I think it is valuable for them to know that there are different ways to write and more than one kind of story. Readers and writers have to decide what they want to read and how they want to write, but it's a shame if they don't try different things before they make their decision. At least that's the way I feel about it.
Jude
