Ann wrote:
Okay, time for some mini-feedback....
Ann, you are incapable of writing "mini-feedback!" You're also incapable of writing bad feedback. Everything you write is so well thought out and eloquent. I like reading what you have to say about stories, even when I disagree with what you write, because you always do such an excellent job of expressing yourself.
I'm afraid I'm going to digress from the party line on one point. I'm truly sorry that Lana died, and I'm not suggesting you were wrong to let her expire! She was most definitely NOT 'the one' for Clark. Instead of wrapping up a loose end, though, this event has the potential to become a major source of angst in your sequel (hint, hint). Even though Clark and Lois came together at the end, and even though Lois convinced Clark that it was definitely, conclusively not his fault that Lana died, the heart doesn't always listen to the head, no matter how reasonable the head might be. This is something that has the potential to haunt Clark for the rest of his life. What about Lana's family and friends? Wouldn't he feel some guilt (albeit unreasonable guilt) about being around them, even in Clark clothes? Isn't this a potential plot point for your sequel (additional hint)? And wouldn't Lois be even more prone to put herself in danger now, since she's partnered with Superman (or soon will be)?
(opinion of sequel possibility here:)
This is an excellent story, and it's a fairly original take on the beginnings of Lois and Clark. I applaud your creativity, your originality, your imagination, and your presentation of said characteristics. I sense a Kerth nomination in your future.
Keep up the good work!
