Thanks to Queen and Classica
I agree with a lot of you actually
the story was a little rushed though the mill... and sort of came out as blackbread (or rye) instead of white filo-pastry/croisants (i cant spell)
those things such as Jimmy did bug me at first...
And I didnt think a lot of stuff through...
again i take o claim to the epp....write genre/ nor the epp-rewrite with kids thingy...
the story was written as a script,... because i thought it easier to just copy and paste bits from the
lcficmbs.com site
I am reworking it though, to be :
a-not in script form
b- have the whole dble-dating thing sorted out...
as well as trying a few other epps.
I know, I know, ....
it never pays to be lazy
but we all learn from our mistakes...
