Well, what I think is missing from the story is a girlfriend for Dan, but I think that about every story and I'm pretty sure that I'm the only one.
Other than that I can't really think of anything, but I do like Roger's suggestion of having more of Jonathan and Martha's reactions.
This was an adorable little piece. I love how you use Clark's flying to give him time to think things over. I also like the retrospective look at the events of WWW; it's really interesting to watch him overanalyze the events of the day.
A great job once again, Alicia! Keep writing!
~Anna
